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Carsyn Smith Jun 2014
I wonder, love, if you see
these stars that hang over me
or if you, so far away,
forget to look up?
My first attempt at a Doditsu poem...
The horizon was pure Magic:
Pink blue white softness ~ Light born
At the sunset ~ full Moon in bloom. . .
Saw you on wheels  ~ son!
Dodoitsu
7/7/7/5

Imagined by
Impeccable Space
Poetic traveller
a blue winged butterfly
pirouetted in the garden
like a pretty ballerina
twirling on the stage
eve's elongated shadows
darkened the atmosphere
for the company of hikers
trekking Milton Ridge
LD Goodwin Mar 2013
India women dip white
linen cloths into vats of
the most beautiful colors,
Yogis meditate.


*Dodoitsu 7,7,7,5  Japanese style of poetry. Circa 1600s. Often concerning love or work, and usually comical.  In my case I was trying to show an analogy between dipping into meditation and the dipping of cloth in a vat of dye. But I also found it humorous that the men meditated, while the women worked.
Harrogate, TN March 2013
cicadas thrummed all day
as the sun searingly shone
their drumming beat abated
when the cool breeze came
the rock face had altered
after years of weathering
it had gone from rough to smooth
this is erosion
the rain's damp streaming tendrils
caressed the dry landscape
with a kindly moistening
to revive its soils
Hilda Aug 2014
in eastern meadow and wood
mushrooms of lemon and beige
strawberry and creamy white
flood me with rapture
© Hilda August 22, 2014
as eve fell a pair of swans
flew across the serene lake
to settle near a pontoon
till dawn came again
as the ***** ***** wind whirled
it splayed plumes of dust
across the salt-bush terrain
on that dry May day
Presently, this poem is the poem of the week, on the Oz Poetic Society website.
across the crystal clear lake
the swans did gracefully glide
their deportment o'er water
calm in countenance
as the yacht neared the pier
the crowd applauded loudly
for the lone yachtsman had won
against the rough seas
Sally A Bayan Mar 2017
(a second time posting)


T'was a short poem I was reading...
I had started writing
My comments,
When...
Along came a very strange feeling,
With very strange thoughts:

"This... has exactly happened before...
This poem...I have read before...
Written these very same thoughts before!"

Over and over, I blinked... had to make sure...
But, all at once... one brief moment...
I found myself seated beside a grand piano,
By a wide ostentatious stairway,
In a bright, candle-lit mansion...
But, stranger still, while I was writing,
My eyes strayed to my right,
To a mirror by the wall...
I saw a handsome young man,
With slightly long curly hair,
Wearing a long-sleeved, white ruffled shirt
And a pair of dark pants,
Holding paper and quill,
Looking back at me.

I was staring at myself!!!

I was holding the paper,
Where I had written my thoughts,
About a poem titled,
"....WILT...."



Sally

Copyright November 5, 2013
Rosalia Rosario A. Bayan

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             Below is Timothy's poem,
             the reason for my "Deja Vu."


WILT

The wilting of the flowers;
Ephemeral bubble bursts;
The last grains of sand run out;—
I wilt just like flow'rs.


~Timothy~
Dodoitsu.
© Timothy 30 July, 2013.
Unbelievable....but true...
   Some years ago, I was reading Timothy's poem titled WILT....
      I was typing my comments, and in a split second,
         I suddenly found myself there....in that strange setting.
night time doth slowly encroach
on the creatures of the bush
their activity shall quieten
as the stars sparkle
Joseph Merrick once told me,
"We are superficial *****.
Beauty is only skin deep.
Mankind is the FREAK."
give a thought to the nurses
they're on duty twenty four seven
they tend and care for the sick
all over the world
To-day, is International Nurses Day.
the scent of sweet lavender
which floated through the pretty field
reminded him of a girlfriend
in his college days
gorgeous sparkling pinholes
bejewel the night sky's cape
millions of stunning sequins
glistening diamonds
paddocks dry cry out for rain
crops all wilting neath the strain
hopes of a harvest gone
drought's grip stays too long
a lambent sphere of sunlight
doth grace our patch of landscape
the gullies and hillsides
glimmer in its rays
Sitting in my clean dress clothes
looking for a distraction
Sunday I will make amends
until then I dream
Alexa Sz May 2010
His body is round and plump
his stomach drags on the ground
his legs vanish in his fat
Watch out he might pop!
This is a dodoitsu. This is a Japanese type of poetry usually about love or humor. The syllable use is 7-7-7-5 unlike a haiku which is 5-7-5.
Marius Surleac Apr 2010
The words I wrote on the sky
with stars instead of blue ink
- signs of my heart's vibrations
on top of this soul

**© Marius Surleac
she's a social butterfly
flying to all engagements
her wings work at a fast pace
flitting here and there
glimmering sunlight played
on the ocean as fish shoals
were herded into tight bunches
by ravenous sharks
a mother duck piloted
her ducklings across the creek
as they were unfamiliar
with its flowing course

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