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Reece Aug 24
Most have a monotonous mountain of molasses,
And, I hear they’re returning in masses.
Always viscous and vicious to prevent one’s escape.
We’re all just pawns in their grand game.
To bind us, tantalize us, and break us repeatedly.
Lie, bribe, and shatter our fleeting sense of security.
To lull us into a slumber meant for us to lose our dreams,
And then wake up and wonder what we’re meant to be.
It comes in many forms, and it’s called by many names,
All of them referring to the same sordid pile of shame.

Try as we might to escape unscathed,
Only to be bound and beaten until nothing but a husk remains.
The molasses surrounds us, pummeling us into the ground.
As we cry for help, but there’s no one around.
For they’re dealing with their own malicious mount,
Gagging us with worries to drown out every sound.
We struggle, although muffled, we try to overcome,

But even if we win, the battle isn’t won.
When we defeat a mountain, another swiftly takes its place.
This new one could be worse, as it grabs you in a devouring embrace.
You’ll overcome it; it’s a given, as many have before you.
But these battles, rest assured, will take your will to see them through.
These monotonous mountains are tenacious and cruel,
The molasses, so viscous, an evil witch’s brew.
Don’t think it’s honey, it isn’t nearly as sweet,
And don’t have the audacity to accept defeat.
It won’t be easy, after all, it is a war,
But one you can win with your shield and sword.

So, when you see a monotonous mountain of molasses,
Take solace, knowing full well you have the tools to surpass it!
Here's your hopeful optimism!
Àŧùl Nov 2024
I
Did
Realise
In Time,
To succeed
And my dad
Guided me to
The epitome of
Worldly success.
Now I'm a beacon,
For you and others,
In this complete fray.
You have my example,
I realised that I have to,
Without procrastinating,
Put efforts for success too,
And for a lifestyle achieving,
I practised writing mock tests,
Not any more novels, none bro,
For I realised that I'm mi'l class.
The Indian mi'l class put efforts,
Without these, there's no bun,
So, I solved mock tests daily,
I didn't shy away and run,
Put my efforts regularly,
You too need just study.

No legislator will think of you,
For you come from the mi'l class,
And from the gen'l cat'ry too.
My HP Poem #2022
©Atul Kaushal

Meta AI's opinion:
"The Flame of Realisation" inspires with its message of perseverance and hard work.

Key takeaways:

1. Personal growth: Overcoming procrastination, realizing potential.
2. Fatherly guidance: Valuing parental support.
3. Success through effort: Emphasizing daily practice (mock tests).
4. Middle-class pride: Recognizing the importance of hard work.
5. Social context: Addressing societal expectations, legislation.

Poetic devices:

1. Metaphor (Flame of Realisation)
2. Alliteration (mi'l class, gen'l cat'ry)
3. Repetition (I realised)
4. Rhyme

Themes:

1. Self-improvement
2. Family influence
3. Perseverance
4. Social awareness

Your poem encourages readers to:

1. Take responsibility for success
2. Value hard work
3. Overcome procrastination

Inspiring others with your journey!

Would you like to:

1. Discuss overcoming procrastination techniques?
2. Explore the impact of parental guidance?
3. Analyze societal expectations vs. individual goals?
4. Share more poetry or experiences?
Jeremy Betts Sep 2024
An unwanted prize
That's what lies
Beyond the reflection of skies
Behind these blue eyes
Past this gentle disguise
Child like but wise
Keeping from view what would give rise
To a litany of farewells and goodbyes

©2024
Zywa Sep 2024
Is a general

thirsty for blood like plants are --


thirsty for water?
Play "The Three Arrows" (1972, Iris Murdoch), Act One, scene Two

Collection "Unspoken"
Àŧùl Jun 2024
Enter 2014, the jungle became a democracy,
And elections were held.
The lion won and became the king,
And the opposition were decimated.
A similar thing happened 5 years later,
And the hyenas all united beyond factions.

2024, the elections were held yet again,
The earlier king got lesser votes.
But the lion was chosen the king anyway,
Still, the hyenas behaved as if they won.
The prince of hyenas, 53 years of age,
Claimed a moral victory and they celebrated.

It's like the silver medalist celebrating,
And their minions are to blame.
We voted without thinking,
And they capitalised the game.
Everything they did to build the jungle,
Into a paradise went down the drain.
My HP Poem #1971
©Atul Kaushal
ShininGale Apr 2021
𝘐 𝘩𝘦𝘢𝘳𝘥 𝘵𝘩𝘢𝘵 𝘣𝘢𝘵𝘵𝘭𝘦𝘴 𝘢𝘳𝘦 𝘥𝘪𝘧𝘧𝘦𝘳𝘦𝘯𝘵 𝘧𝘳𝘰𝘮 𝘸𝘢𝘳.

𝘞𝘢𝘳 𝘤𝘰𝘯𝘴𝘪𝘴𝘵 𝘰𝘧 𝘴𝘮𝘢𝘭𝘭 𝘣𝘢𝘵𝘵𝘭𝘦𝘴 𝘸𝘪𝘵𝘩𝘪𝘯,
𝘣𝘢𝘵𝘵𝘭𝘦𝘴 𝘢𝘳𝘦 𝘸𝘰𝘯 𝘸𝘩𝘪𝘭𝘦 𝘸𝘢𝘳 𝘪𝘴 𝘦𝘯𝘥𝘭𝘦𝘴𝘴.

𝘓𝘪𝘧𝘦 𝘪𝘴 𝘸𝘢𝘳 𝘢𝘯𝘥 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘣𝘢𝘵𝘵𝘭𝘦𝘴 𝘢𝘳𝘦 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘤𝘪𝘳𝘤𝘶𝘮𝘴𝘵𝘢𝘯𝘤𝘦𝘴.
𝘕𝘦𝘷𝘦𝘳 𝘢𝘴𝘬 𝘵𝘰 𝘦𝘯𝘥 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘸𝘢𝘳, 𝘣𝘦𝘤𝘢𝘶𝘴𝘦 𝘪𝘵 𝘪𝘴 𝘯𝘰𝘵 𝘰𝘶𝘳𝘴 𝘵𝘰 𝘥𝘦𝘤𝘪𝘥𝘦.
𝘌𝘯𝘥𝘪𝘯𝘨 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘸𝘢𝘳 𝘪𝘴 𝘭𝘪𝘬𝘦 𝘦𝘯𝘥𝘪𝘯𝘨 𝘺𝘰𝘶𝘳 𝘭𝘪𝘧𝘦.

𝘉𝘶𝘵 𝘵𝘩𝘦𝘳𝘦 𝘴𝘩𝘰𝘶𝘭𝘥𝘯'𝘵 𝘣𝘦 𝘢𝘯𝘺 𝘣𝘢𝘵𝘵𝘭𝘦𝘴 𝘵𝘰 𝘣𝘦𝘨𝘪𝘯 𝘸𝘪𝘵𝘩,
𝘰𝘯𝘭𝘺 𝘫𝘰𝘶𝘳𝘯𝘦𝘺𝘴 𝘵𝘰 𝘨𝘰 𝘵𝘩𝘳𝘰𝘶𝘨𝘩.

𝘙𝘦𝘴𝘵 𝘢𝘴𝘴𝘶𝘳𝘦𝘥 𝘧𝘰𝘳 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘸𝘢𝘳 𝘸𝘦 𝘸𝘢𝘯𝘵 𝘵𝘰 𝘦𝘯𝘥,
𝘸𝘢𝘴 𝘢𝘭𝘳𝘦𝘢𝘥𝘺 𝘸𝘰𝘯 𝘣𝘺 𝘎𝘰𝘥 𝘏𝘪𝘮𝘴𝘦𝘭𝘧.
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Don't worry we are not alone, He fights with us,
but He already won it for us!

When was the last time you entrust Him all your battles?
When was the last time you cried for help and say "I need you!"

Don't forget the after every war there's peace and peace is only He can give.
jojsq Apr 2021
What started out as a trivial matter,
Has grown into something significant.
Even though the approach is smatter
And his words don't seem clarificant,
He still conveys his best,
Expecting an answer, or a sign,
Patiently waits for a closure
With his fingers entwined.
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