haven't slept on it yet. but couldn't stop thinking about it. so im gonna try to change it, to make it how i want. see if it has potential. this is it before any edits..

i feel so out of place
they forget my name
and why im there.

the thoughts they just race,
they wont stop.
why wont they stop?

and now the editing..

i feel so...
out of place here.
its like they forget
my name
and why im even
there.

the thoughts
they just keep on racing,
like they're all competing --
winner gets the reward of
tears flowing.
emotions non-stop.
no runner ups.

and they wont stop.
why wont they stop?

i actually think i like it. im gonna read over it tomorrow, see how i feel. might end up splitting the piece in half..